It's not bad, but the animation is choppy and awkwardly slow sometimes. The spelling and grammar is still lacking in certain places (some of it is really obvious and makes me wonder how you could miss the errors, such as spelling 'regret' as 'regreat') I know you might not think that's a big deal but it really lowers the quality of the animation, since most of the time is spent reading the text. I suggest you proofread this, run it through Microsoft Word or something.
Otherwise, I don't entirely understand the plot yet, but I love how these characters are completely custom. (...Slender man is a little odd and not my first choice for a baddie but hey, it animated pretty well)
Look forward to seeing the other parts - just remember to correct your writing errors.
Im Trying to Make the Animations as Great as i can For all of you guys and Thank you for pointing that stuff out i will take them under Consideration about the Text Yeah I Know it's Kinda Crappy i try to not Use any short of Text Fixing Program so i can Improve my English on my Own But as you say it takes Away some of the "Quality" of my animation i will use MS Word or something so i can Fix any of my errors now for the Story Part Don't Worry it's Part 1 wait for the Others and then you can tell me if you get it or not If it Helps and it's a thing i forgot to mention on the Description this is kinda inspired as mutch A Continiouation of my Older animation i made called the Slenderman or something and other than that Thnx for Pointing my Errors out i will try to Correct them as mutch as i can